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1) Question:
The graph below shows the average monthly temperatures in three major cities.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
2) Answer:
The chart gives information on average monthly temperatures in Paris, Boston and Melbourne.
Paris and Boston have similar climates; both having lower temperatures between November and March and higher temperatures for the rest of the year, peaking in July and August. Melbourne has the opposite cycle with cooler temperatures between May and August, with the hotter months being from September to April.
Boston’s coldest month is January with an average temperature of just under 5 Celsius and the weather gets increasingly hotter until it reaches a peak of over 30 degrees. It then continues to decline by approximately 5 degrees per month until December. Similarly, January is also Paris’s coldest, but with a milder temperature of just below 10 C and it steadily rises until it reaches a peak of just under 25 C in July and August, before becoming consistently cooler until the end of the year.
In contrast, January and December are Melbourne’s hottest months when temperatures average just over 25 degrees Celsius. They then steadily fall each month until they get to a low of around 15 degrees, before getting warmer each month until December.
3) Chat GPT Assessment:
Scoring:
Overall, I would give this response a score of 8.0.This response effectively conveys the key information from the chart and demonstrates strong writing skills with only minor issues.
Task Achievement (Coherence and Cohesion): 8
The response effectively summarizes the information presented in the chart regarding average monthly temperatures in Paris, Boston, and Melbourne. It provides a clear comparison of the temperature patterns in these three cities, highlighting the differences and similarities. The response is well-structured and follows a logical sequence, making it easy for the reader to understand. The use of transition words and phrases (e.g., "similarly," "in contrast") helps to maintain coherence and cohesion. Overall, the response achieves the task of presenting the key information from the chart.
Lexical Resource (Vocabulary): 8
The response demonstrates a good range of vocabulary related to weather and temperature. It uses appropriate terms to describe temperature changes (e.g., "milder temperature," "steadily rises," "consistently cooler") and effectively conveys the information without overusing specific words. The use of numbers and units (e.g., Celsius) is accurate, contributing to the clarity of the description.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: 8
The response shows a strong command of English grammar. Sentences are well-structured, and verb tenses are used appropriately to describe past, present, and future temperature trends.
The response also features complex sentences, which enhance the quality of expression. There are only a few minor issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., "both having" should be "both have") and prepositions (e.g., "from September to April" should be "between September and April").
Task Response and Overview: 7
The response effectively summarizes the main temperature trends for Paris, Boston, and Melbourne. It mentions key details, such as the coldest and hottest months for each city and the overall temperature patterns.
However, there are a couple of inaccuracies. For example, the phrase "before becoming consistently cooler until the end of the year" could be clearer in its explanation.
Generate Band 9:
The provided chart illustrates the monthly temperature averages in three major cities: Paris, Boston, and Melbourne.
It is evident that Paris and Boston share a similar climate pattern, characterized by lower temperatures from November to March and higher temperatures from April to October, peaking in July and August. Melbourne, in contrast, experiences the inverse cycle, with cooler temperatures from May to August and warmer months spanning from September to April.
In Boston, the chilliest month is January, registering an average temperature of just under 5 degrees Celsius. From there, the temperatures steadily ascend, culminating in a peak of over 30 degrees. Following this, there is a gradual descent of approximately 5 degrees each month until December. Similarly, Paris's coldest month is also January, albeit with a milder average temperature of just below 10 degrees Celsius. The temperatures there rise consistently until reaching a zenith of just under 25 degrees in July and August, after which they taper off, maintaining a cooler trend for the remainder of the year.
In Melbourne, a deviation from the other two cities is noted, as January and December emerge as the hottest months, each registering an average temperature slightly exceeding 25 degrees Celsius. Subsequently, the temperatures gradually decrease each month until they reach a nadir of around 15 degrees. However, the trend reverses, with temperatures warming incrementally each month until the end of the year.
Comparison:
Overall, the Band 9 response stands out for its precision, accuracy, and sophisticated language use. It is a more polished and error-free piece of writing, making it a stronger candidate for a Band 9 score on the IELTS Writing Task 1. The 8.0 response, while good, has some minor inaccuracies and slightly less sophisticated language, leading to a slightly lower score.
Task Achievement (Coherence and Cohesion):
The 8.0 response provides a clear comparison of temperature trends in the three cities, making it easy to follow, but it contains minor inaccuracies, such as Melbourne's hottest months.
The Band 9 response offers a more precise and accurate comparison of temperature patterns. It maintains a consistently clear structure, minimizing any room for misunderstanding.
Lexical Resource (Vocabulary):
Both responses use a good range of vocabulary related to weather and temperature, but the 8.0 response may use slightly simpler language at times.
The Band 9 response uses more sophisticated vocabulary, enhancing the quality of expression and precision in conveying information.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy:
The 8.0 response exhibits a strong command of grammar but contains a few minor errors in subject-verb agreement and prepositions.
The Band 9 response has impeccable grammar throughout, with no errors.
Task Response and Overview:
The 8.0 response effectively summarizes the key temperature trends but contains minor inaccuracies in the description of Melbourne's hottest months.
The Band 9 response accurately addresses all aspects of the chart, providing a highly detailed and precise account of temperature patterns.
4) Analysis
Vocabulary:
Average monthly temperatures: Nhiệt độ trung bình hàng tháng.
Peaking in: Đạt đỉnh vào.
Opposite cycle: Chu kỳ đối diện.
Milder: Êm dịu, nhẹ nhàng hơn.
Chilliest: Lạnh nhất.
Polished: Sáng bóng, hoàn thiện.
Impeccable: Hoàn hảo, không có lỗi lầm.
Tape off: Giảm dần.
Zenith: Cao nhất.
Nadir: Thấp nhất.
Good writing:
Get increasingly hotter: Trở nên ngày càng nóng hơn.
Reach a peak: Đạt đến đỉnh điểm.
Become consistently cooler: Trở nên lạnh hơn một cách đều đặn.
Error-free: Không có lỗi, không mắc sai sót.
Minimizing any room for error: Giảm thiểu lỗi lầm.
Characterized by: Được đặc trưng bởi.
In contrast, it experiences the inverse cycle: Ngược lại, nó trải qua chu kì đảo nghịch.
However, the trend reverses: Tuy nhiên, xu hướng đảo chiều.
Spaning from ... to ...: Bao gồm từ ... đến ...
Registering ...: Ghi nhận.
Steadily ascend: Tăng dần.
Culmunating in a peak of: Đỉnh điểm ở:
Gradual Descent: Sự giảm dần.
Albeit: Mặc dù.
Reaching a zenith: Đạt đến mức cao nhất.
A deviation is noted: Sự sai lệch được ghi nhận.
Subsequently: Sau đó.
Following this: Theo sau.
Reach a nadir of around: Đạt đến mức thấp nhất khoảng.
5) Personal Note:
Template:
The provided char illustrates ... in ....
It is evident that [Paris and Boston are the same], characterizes by [low temperature, high, temperature, peaking in ...]. [Melbourne], in contrast, experience the inverse cycle, with [cooler temperatures, warmer months].
In Boston, [chillest]. From there, [ascend, peak]. Following this, [descent]
Similarly, Paris [coldest, rise, zenith], after which they [tape off].
In Melbourne, a deviation from the other two cities is noted, [hottest], each registering .... Subsequently, [decrease, nardir]. However, the trend reverses, [warming increamentally].
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